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Thursday 11 December 2014

Josh Art Attack

This video is about a man who went to the cafe terrace at night for a tea and a muffin.

Josh Art Attack from Team 4 Pes on Vimeo.

Monday 1 December 2014

The wedding

On Saturday we went to a garden for my cousins wedding. When we got there the wedding was already finished so we went to a hotel for the celebration.


When we got to the hotel there was thousands of people there. when we were celebrating we did some performances for money to buy them a car when me, my brother and my two cousins performed we got up to $150 from  everyone in the room.


When we were done performing we had desert and went back to our table to eat when we finished my cousin tanu was dancing with his wife and when the wedding was over everyone was cleaning up.

Finally we went to my cousins house for the day and went back home for a sleep. The next day went to church to celebrate there marriage again because we never celebrated it properly on Saturday so we celebrated it properly.

   

Wednesday 26 November 2014

Camp Bentzon / Kawau island recount


On Tuesday the 18 of November we went to Kawau island / Camp Bentzon for 3 days. After we got there we took the bags and food in then when that was done we went for a hike up KILLER HILL to the beach  .

After we got to the beach we went to the shore to throw some shells rocks and we even found some oysters and pipis then we went to our cabins to unpack our stuff from our bags.

Then when we got unpacked we went to the beach for a swim. There were 2 options we could do boming off the wharf or going to the shore to swim. Then when we did that we had competitions for who does the biggest bomb of the wharf

.Then on Wednesday we watched a movie about Pirate that would never die and that movie was really cool to watch because it was like the chase when the Pirate was chasing after the guys who took the princess.  



On Thursday we had our concert and we did spotlight and we got awards for who got back the most and Me, John Lee, Jessica. Then on Friday we packed our bags to get ready to go back home.


But then It was the last day of camp then we had our sports like Bush Baseball, Volleyball, Touch & Swimming but what I liked the most was Touch & Volleyball Then when we finished all our sports we had lunch for the last time and waited for the fairy.

Then when we got to the wharf we went to the park then we had a little run around and the bus picked us up. Then we were at school waiting for our parents. The Highlight of the day for me was Spotlight & Sailing & Kayaking.



Thursday 13 November 2014

Manaiakalani

Yesterday we went to Sylvia Park to watch our films that we made on the biggest screen I ever saw It was really cool to because we got to watch everyone's film.

The time we started was at 8:30 so we went to the hall to get the kids we had to look after. Then when we got to Sylvia park we went inside the movie thearter and watched the schools film.

The films that I liked was Day Dreamer, and Keep in touch. Those were the best movies I saw and they were really, really funny.

Hope you enjoy



Monday 10 November 2014

Guy Fawkes

On Friday Me my brother & sister & cousin did Guy Fawkes at the back of her house. At 8:00 we did Guy Fawkes at the back of my cousins house.


When we did fire works we only had sparklers and One Firework So we bought more fireworks and we did it until 9:30pm and went back inside.

After that we watched a movie then we went back home and watched TV until midnight and went to sleep.







   

Thursday 30 October 2014

Roosters vs warriors

 
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On the holidays I went to watch the Roosters vs Warriors with my papa when we got there we were waiting for the line to go down because the line was long and then 5 minutes later we got in the stadium.


It was really cool but the best player was Shaun Johnson because he caught Daniel Tupou when he was going for a try a but the warriors still lost to the roosters.



But the warriors did a good job and the player of the match was Shaun Johnson and everyone was cheering but the player of the day for the roosters was Michael Jennings.



Hope you enjoy


How to read wood patterns

This is a video about reading wood patterns but the most best thing that we found out is that we can find out how old the tree is by reading the rings on the tree or stump.

Wood Patterns from Team 4 Pes on Vimeo.

Wednesday 29 October 2014

Explanation writing

How to be a Good and Successful Point Englander is being a good listener, and a kind person. You have to work hard so that you can get higher in Literacy and Maths. So you can become a better person so you can get a reputation at anything you want.

You have to Achieve your learning goals and get the best marks at learning as possible. If it doesn't work you just keep trying at everything you failed at. The thing you need to do if you want to be a successful Point englander is if you listen to your parents, relievers, and also the teacher.


Listening to the teacher is the main thing to be a good successful Pt Englander so you can get the ideas and get what they're saying if you don’t you will have no idea what to do and go down. In learning but no one wants that to happen to them because they want to strive to succeed for a good job & reputation.


An good job means a good life for you and everyone else if they be a good person a good listener and a polite and nice person so you or someone else can be whatever you want to be in the future. So thats if you succeed in school then high school then college after that you go to university where you can learn how to do stuff you want to be good at

Wednesday 22 October 2014

Reading a map

Today we have been working on our reading maps work sheets. We have to learn how to read maps, compasses, you have to find your direction. 

Monday 20 October 2014

Explanation hats writing

Do you want to get sunburned ?  if you don’t read this“ You need a hat, sunglasses and sunblock.


You have to wear a hat to protect your head from the sun a trucker cap is the worst hat because it only protects the face.  Not the back of your head  and so you don’t get skin cancer on your head wear a fully covered hat.  


You have to put sunscreen on to your body arms and legs so they won’t get burned from the sun and skin cancer.  And a headache and don’t get burned when you're swimming or having a walk on the beach.


3 You will have to put on some glasses because you can’t see properly and you might get blind and get an headache.  If you don’t wear sun glasses you don’t wear sun glasses you might get a headache and get blind from the brightness of the sun.

The way you stay safe in the sun is that if you were wearing a hat, sunglasses, and some sunscreen.

Friday 17 October 2014

Going to Hawks bay

Last week I went to Hawks Bay. With my aunty and my brother. When we packed our bags my mum gave us $20 each when we got there we went to our room in the hotel.


The next morning we had breakfast and got ready to go to the pool when we finished our breakfast we went to the pool for a swim then we went to the hotel for a sleep. 


Then the other morning we packed our bags for tomorrow because we had to go back to Auckland but then we went to the museum while we were inside we where it was packed with tourist that came from England, France, and Italy.


We went everywhere in the museum but the best part was when there was a dinosaur show because the dinosaur was friendly and I just found out that it was controlled by an remote.


Hope you enjoy my holiday writing


Thursday 16 October 2014

How to answer a multi-choice question

The things you need to do is.

1. Look at the question

2. What do you know and what you don't know

3. Work out the answer

4. Think about it.



Hope you enjoy

Wednesday 15 October 2014

Ninja turtles

On Thursday i went to watch Ninja Turtles at Sylvia Park. When we got ready we waited until my dad got back from work the time we had to go was at 1:00 so we spend our time on the my ps3. When my dad got back we got in the car to papatoe to see my Brother Isaiah and my, Sister Eva, because they had a sleepover and my aunt, and cousins, When we got their they were getting ready. After when they were ready they got ready we headed off to Sylvia park.

When we got their everybody was yelling screaming then they got told of by my older cousin pa semi and my aunt. Then they gave us a count to see how many and if there was nobody lost like at school then we went to the movies and when you look at the wall it was filled with all the famous actors in new zealand like Stan walker, Robbie magasiva.


When we went in to the theater we got our drinks and stuff. Then we had to share with the person next to us until the movie turned on my cousin was still talking and everyone in the theatre told her too shhh but she was still talking but when the Ninja turtle movie was on she was very quiet’’.







Wednesday 24 September 2014

Trip to museum

Yesterday class 6, 7 & 8 went to the Museum. We went to learn about Maori culture. Our teachers and parents went with us and we travelled on the bus.



My favourite part was the volcano room. It was a house that you got to go inside and then it shook. My whole group went into the room together. I decided to wait outside because I gets sick. It was so loud and people were screaming. I was glad I didn’t go in.

Creative writing

My phone was ringing i tried to stop it but i kept making a noise. So I said who is it in a deep dark voice (i’m coming for you) then i dropped my phone and there were too big dark shadows at the back of me my head slowly turned around. There was potato bag went around my head i was suffocating.

I am Josh Williams from the police i am 24 years of age I have a brother 2 Big brothers Harlem Williams, & Michael Williams’’. They are both 26 years of age and they are twins they were born October 8th on 1987. on the present day at night Harlem a phone call when he heard what he said he dialed the police to help.



When Harlem was waiting for the police someone was knocking on the door it was michael and his agent friends they got backup and when the police arrived they got out there bats & everything else Josh was hung up.

TO BE CONTINUED.

Josh was hung up in a big chamber he had knife marks and blood all over his skin everywhere but when Josh asked who he was and to let him down then it collapsed then he was on the ground waiting for the person to come when he came out Josh got knocked out from a punch that he got from the murderer.


See you in the next chapter



Rock climbing


In the weekend it was my little niece birthday at rock climbing she turned 5 years old there was a whole lot of people there like aunties, uncles, parents, cousins, & brothers, and sisters.

when we  got there they were all ready rock climbing and eating but they were going to eat birthday cake and I asked if I could go rock climbing.


After that we went rock climbing and all of us split up to climb different walls everyone was finding it difficult to begin climbing it was really easy for me. Then when it was 3:00pm we went home  









Tuesday 23 September 2014

Weekend in Hamilton

Last weekend me, my Nana, and  Papa, Went to Hamilton For the weekend. When we got our stuff we were driving to Hamilton. When we were there we got there we went to see my aunty in the hospital because she had cancer until - Last month & on Friday Last week.


After that we went to the hotel for a nap and tomorrow we went to the pools it had a big slide, a pool where you jump on the board into the pool but it was to crowed inside so we went outside it was really fun so it was to cold for my Nana so went inside when people started to leave.


Then on the last day of our weekend we went to a skate park and went shopping. when we were about to leave I got a phone call from my aunty at hospital and the good news was that she was that she was out of hospital then when we got back she was in the house and we had her birthday.

Hope you enjoy




  

Tuesday 16 September 2014

Mixed CG Animation

This is my animation that i finished and it is a mixed sport. The mixed sport is Football basketball, Basketball Foot ball, and my made up game AFL Football hope you enjoy.

Josh CG Mixed Animation from Team 4 Pes on Vimeo.

Wednesday 3 September 2014

Pigs & Ducks

This afternoon I did a maths problem solving Question about pigs and ducks hope you enjoy.




Tuesday 2 September 2014

Samoan Narrative Writing



Harlem and Josh were both in the hospital for 1 and a half years. finally when they got out they both lost their memories of what their jobs and family names and they didn’t know each other so there memories and personalities were different. Harlem was the police man and the smart one and Josh was the athletic one. After that they got their own house & their own personalities back but one day Harlem, & ,Josh Were going to their uncles, and aunties house but when they got their they both didn’t know each other.


  
So they were arguing with each other until their aunt came and saw them fighting and she didn’t recognize both of them either so she told Harlem & Josh to get of their property or she will call the police and Josh, said I’m a cop’’. But she didn’t believe Josh so they were driving and both of them were remembering what happened that day but their personalities got changed back to themselves and Josh was thinking really hard about that day and realized that Harem was his Brother.



So they got each others number on their phone and Josh called Harlem and Both were talking about that day and they went back to their aunties for a discussion and both of them were talking about what what happened that day and they and they began friends again and they both got jobs Josh was promoted to the chief of the police and harlem was in the commonwealth games and he was in the lego movie and Josh was in the Rio 2 and they both were happy the end.





All Blacks vs Australia

"On Saturday Me, my brother, and sister, went to my Nana & Papa's for the weekend. When we got there they had lots to do first we went to Westfield to get some shopping. We got the same shopping every week Then we went back to there place.

Then we where waiting for our dad to call us so we can watch the game against All blacks and Australia at Eden park while my mum was watching the game with here friend Named Joedey.

When my dad got home from work Me my Brother Isaiah, and my sister Eva Were watching our cartoons and playing on our devices. then when it was 8:00 I changed it to the game at Eden park Then when the game was finished the All Blacks won 36-22 Then We slept at my mum and dads house then we went to sleep but the next day I went back to my Nana & Papas House.  


Thursday 21 August 2014

My Weekend

On the weekend I went to my cousins game. There name is Tony & Kep and there team name is weaselly while we where there the field was crowed with people and the game was long it took 50 minutes and finally the game was over and my cousins team has won the game and that was there final game. the score was 57 - 25.

After that we went home from the game because my cousins and there little sister Gloria were coming over for dinner when my mum was going with here friend to watch the all blacks vs Australia. So when we knew they weren't coming over we went to there house.


Finally we where watching the game and while i was playing on my psp I was watching the game and it was really cool so i got boarded again and i started playing on the computer. i was playing rugby challenge 2 for 15 minutes it was really cool then we had to go home when the game finished by the time we got home it was 12 o'clock the we went to sleep and that was the end of my holiday hope you enjoy.


Tuesday 19 August 2014

Catching the bus in samoa

Today we our reading group about catching the bus in samoa hope you enjoy
Did You Know That buses in samoa don't have a door instead it has an big gap and thats why the hold tight on the rails. The samoan buses don't have windows in stead they have glad wrap as a window.

 Buses in samoa don't have bus signs instead you have to put your hand out so the bus will stop and did you know that people have to sit on someones lap even if you don't know them and finally there is a special bus that takes you from the market to the wharf that is really crowded. Hope you enjoy

Friday 15 August 2014

Event research

Hurdles is a sport that includes running and jumping over obstacles at speed. In sport of athletics forms of basis of a number track and field events which are highly specialized of obstacle racing in these events, a series of barriers known as hurdles are set at precisely measured heights and distances which each athlete must pass by running over.

 Failure to pass over, by passing under, or intentionally knocking over hurdles will result in disqualification. Accidental knocking over of hurdles is not cause for disqualification,but the hurdles are weighted to make doing so disadvantageous.


 Hurdles is a really popular sport because its in the commonwealth games and it is in the olympic sport to it is my favourite sport in the commonwealth games and the olympic sport to. The most hurdles events are 110 hurdles for men to.

Monday 11 August 2014

Commonwealth game country presantation

Commonwealth game event

High Jump is a Olympic sport & commonwealth game sport high jump can be on a field or a track. The rules for high jump is that the competitors have to jump one foot over a bar or a pole and land on the mat but sometime people fail because it is a really hard sport.



High Jump took place in Scotland in the 19 century in ancient greek time it was a really easy rule whoever jumps the highest wins but the technique that everyone used was the scissor technique it was a really easy technique over the that century.



The competitors have to jump measured heights as the high jump pole it is really hard when the pole get higher because you might not make it or you will knock down the pole or you will be disqualified.

Thursday 7 August 2014

Angle

We have been learning about angles for maths and we had to take of the corners of the triangle and it was fun and we made triangles with the scissors hope you enjoy.


Tuesday 5 August 2014

Area and perimeter

This is a picture is of my answer of my area and perimeter.

World war 1

This my writing of the world war 1 from 1914 hope you enjoy

  1. When did they start the war
  2. Who were the countries in the world
  3. Who started the war
  4. Why did new zealand and england have the first war
  5. Who was the country that started the world war 1




Question 1 information:

World War 1 began on July 28 1914 and lasted until November 11 1918. Differences in foreign policies were to blame.





Question 2 information:

Countries that were in the world war 1 was france , greece , japan, new zealand australia, russia, uk, and canada, and taiwan.











Question 3 information:
In 1914 the europeans started the war that caused some people to die it then it ended in 1918, november 11.


Question 4 information:
In world war 1 thousand of people died and more for going to the war.




Question 5 information:
The war world war 8,000 and 500 people came back from the war



Question 6 information:
the country that caused the world war 1 was in europe like UK, France and Italy,

Monday 28 July 2014

Holiday Highlight Writing

Last week on thursday me and my nana went downtown to pay the the bills but first we went to the warehouse to get shoes. When we got there we started looking around for some shoes then i saw some shoes so i tried them on to see if they could fit Then after that I bought myself a slushy maker.

 Then we went to the movies my nana bought the tickets and popcorn and drinks and the movie that we watched was how to train your dragon 2. The best part of the movie was when toothless defeats the monster.

 After that we went to McDonalds for lunch. Then we stayed there for a while so we waited for the bus when the bus arrived there was a big line of people and it took 10 minutes for the line to get smaller. Finally there was no one at the line then we hopped on the bus then went back to my nana’s house. Then i started to finished my tree house up. The Best thing of the day was when i bought myself a slushy maker and went to the movies and i felt really happy when my nana was taking me to the movies.

Thursday 3 July 2014

Ratio practise

My ratio problem

There are 45 hot dogs at a baseball game.

4:20×3
   12:60

Superhero Creative Writing

Lightning is a superhero that saves lives where there is danger anyplace and anywhere. He Causes tornadoes that turns the supervillains into anything that he wants to for an example fire. His Tornado is made from fire he is the top 10 superheroes in the world his real name is Jordan Teau for short J.T.

 His Best Power is water because that is the only power that can turn into weapons like swords, axes and pickaxe. he can cause lightning from the sky to form into into 1,000 of them and destroy his enemy the joker. on a rainy day lightning was working at the news weather man when he heard trouble he got changed. 1 second later he was at the bank and there was a creature that looked like a dog eating everything in the kitchen .

when lightning was standing there watching so he got rid of it he thought to himself if he eats everything he would want to eat bombs so lightning through the bombs in his mouth. so the creature ran away.

 His weakness was acid when he was fighting a acid monster he knew it was his weakness so he used all his superhero powers to defeat it but the he found out its weakness. Water.

 So THE WATER IS THE BEST POWER HE HAD BECAUSE IT TURNS INTO ANYTHING HE WANTS IT TO Nick leaf is a superhero that saves lives a changes futures being a superhero is really cool only if you are a superhero. But when you are watching a superhero it is really cool

Tuesday 24 June 2014

Parts of guitar

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Egg experiement

Today we are doing a egg experiment Hope you enjoy





Friday 20 June 2014

Sunny day Writing

On a hot sunny day I went to the beach. I was running, my feet were burning. When I got to the beach my feet got hotter. It was like it was burning lava. But when It got so hot I was burning myself. So I knew I’ve should've brang my shoe’s to the beach.

Wednesday 18 June 2014

Tuesday 17 June 2014

Fairytale Poster 1 & 2

This is a poster that I made about a fairytale poster about puss in boots and another one about the ugly ducklings mother hope you enjoy.

Friday 13 June 2014

Boat Buoyancy

I am going to tell you about my boat that I made and it floated hope you enjoy

Thursday 12 June 2014

Boat Race Drawing

This is a drawing of my reading activity called the boat race and it is
about a boy called tim. So hope you enjoy

Friday 6 June 2014

Floating and Sinking Dictagloss

This is a little sentence about floating and sinking dictagloss enjoy


Floating and Sinking
Why does a lemon float and an orange with no skin sink? When an orange goes in the water the water goes in the holes of the orange so it pushes down so it makes it heavier.




Tuesday 3 June 2014

The Lightest Wood Ever

This is a story about two boys called Daniel and Jed. So they made a Raft out of wood and it was the lightest wood ever because when they found it they wondered because it was buoyancy. Hope you enjoy


There were these two boys named daniel and jed they have found some wood and they thought it was the lightest wood in the world. They knew that if they put it in the water it would be buoyant.





 

Thursday 29 May 2014

Titanic Timeline Activity

This is an activity that I have finished it is about the titanic and it sinking hope you enjoy

On April 14 the titanic hit an iceberg on the Atlantic ocean so the captain called through the radio. 
For help but so the people sent in some boats to save the people so while the water got halfway through captain smith and the guards let only women and children.


So when the titanic was close to the top the funnel collapsed then the titanic started to snap.
captain smith made a horrible decision so when it got fuller. 
And fuller it the life boats set off but

So when the life boats set off but the ships that were going to save the others they were half-an-hour away.So when it got to midnight the water started to get 2x fuller 
but when the lifeboats got there they

Badminton Recount

I have wrote a recount about badminton because this is a our last week of badminton hope you enjoy. Every thursday we go badminton so we can learn some new technique about badminton here are some of the technique’s we learn’t backhand, forehand, we also do a warm right before we start our warm up is stuck in the mud.

So the rules are if someone touches you have to put your hands up then someone has to double hi-5 you. Now here are some techniques for badminton. Backhand Backhand is when the back of your hand is facing your opponent backhand is a great technique to use or badminton because it makes the shuttle go higher so you can win against your opponent.

 Forehand Forehand is a technique but the best to beat your opponent forehand is when you put your hand up high so if your opponent hits high the forehand technique is the best thing to use for a high shuttle. Badminton makes me feel happy because we get free time this week because its our last week doing badminton.




Monday 26 May 2014

Titanic Letter

On a link called letter generator I wrote a letter to Clive palmer. He is the creator of the Titanic 2. The Titanic II will be on its first trip in 2018. Hope you enjoy my letter that I wrote.



Hi clive palmer i am josh and i would like to give you  some tips. You can remeber to do a drill with the life boats and if the boat hits another ice berg you will know the drill.

and you can do a call out in the microphone if theres danger and you can put more look outs up on the ships and tell them what to look out for so the whole ship will be prepared.

So they know the drill so the drill should be run, get out, get on the life boats check if there all the people on the boat so they will all be safe for anything.

Thursday 15 May 2014

Displacement & Experiment

                                                            Prediction


We are doing an displacement experiment and this is what I will think what will happen.  

Wednesday 14 May 2014

George and the Marvellous Medicine Review

The start of the story

This is a story about a boy called George. He had a grandma looking after him and she was an old grouch. George says so her grandma waiting for her medicine and George made a new medicine that will make her explode so he went around his dads farm. Then put some of some animal pills then he was in the bath room and put a whole bottle of tooth paste.

What I like about the book is when George made the Medicine and gave it to the chicken then it became taller and taller and taller that it was as nearly as tall as Georges Grandma. The chicken had smoke coming out of it beck.


I think adults should read it because they would learn how to make medicine for animals and so they can make pills or know where to get animal pills to.
                         



Monday 12 May 2014

Sink or float

Why do some things float while others sink? If the thing is heavier then it will sink, but if it is lighter then it will float if you put a lemon in the water with no skin or a lemon with skin they bot will float

Thursday 8 May 2014

Thung chai

Today we have been learning thung chai. Thung chai is a boat made out of bamboo and what i've learnt from this book is that the people have a tide mark to see if the tied is low or high. Then I knew that the chrildren have jobs to like helping catch the fish and helping there mother if there is a big catch to sort the fish out. Then they can help there father bring the thung chai and how long it is from New zealand to Qui nhon is 20h and 55 minutes. Hope you enjoy

Holiday highlight recount

This is my holiday highlight recount of me and my brother and Papa at mount eden In the holiday I went to Mt Eden. With my papa and my brother When we got there we played on the park but it was slippery because it was raining the other day when we found out it because it was wet and we were slipping on the way there then we went to the mountain. When we got there we were tired because we had to walk up the stairs and when we got to the top we went into the key house. but me and my brother were playing on the computer and looking at the pictures. Then we were playing basketball outside the key house. Then we went to get lunch at the shop then me and my brother had to walk all the way up the mountain because we couldn’t eat in the keyhouse if you did you would be told to go outside. then me and my brother went to the park we went on the flying fox there were lots of people to. But when we had to go back to the key house was at 8 to 10 then we had to walk all the way up the stairs again then we saw our papa in his truck looking for us. Me and my brother & papa had a great day out mount eden.

Monday 14 April 2014

Noah the moa

Noah the moa is a bird that is extinct. If he was alive what I would do with him is ride on his back what I think his feathers will be like is smooth because he is the largest bird on earth then me and Noah will go back to his time so we could see what is time looked like when the maori people came.


Tuesday 1 April 2014

Native kowhai trees



  
 We are learning about native trees but my one is an kowhai tree but is not quite not finshed yet so please check back.

Thursday 27 March 2014

Why we use a knife and fork

Why do we use our knife and fork to eat with?

Keeping clean how can we keep clean? 
How we keep clean is when we wash our hands before eating and by eating with our knives and forks. If we don’t use our knives and forks we will get germs in our mouths or on computers of any device. 

Bite sized pieces 
Bite sized pieces is if you steak or meat is to hard you cut it in half then you can so that it will be better to chew so you can’t choke on anything hard to bite like you steak or your meat and any kind of meat so using your knives and forks is the best.

Use your manners 
How you can use your manners we use our manners by saying thank you saying the prayer doing the dishes and help set up the table for dinner or a celebration like christmas new years or someones birthday.

Why we use a knife and fork 
We use a knife and fork because we have to keep our hands clean and never eat with your hands because we will get germs on phones, computer and different kinds of things







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